I finally played the game! I am amazed by the way you found balance in toxicity and serenity in the Silvia-Ana relationship. I followed the plot with great interest. In terms of art - sprites is one thing (you're doing great non-furry characters too :3 ), but i was absolutely stunned by the drawn background images, especially the last one. They had such a unique quality.
And - i really loved all your choices of music - it's hard to judge my pieces, so i'll be talking about Cancrizans Canon and ConsBosD23 ones. They didn't feel like just complementary to writing. They matched the vibe, but sometimes in a vivid way, adding a different level to the atmosphere.
The moon really shines from your work. I vibe with it and i loved it.
Hope that this is your first game, but not the last!
Yay!! Thank you so much for the kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the plot and the art and the writing :)
Isn't the music lovely?? Your pieces added SO much, and I'm so grateful for Canrizan's Canon offering theirs as well, and for ConsBosD23 posting theirs on Freesound. I'm glad you also felt that they matched and added to the atmosphere! Wouldn't have felt the same at all without this music, so thank you again for that.
i studied indian studies in college and in our department, there were quite a few of those like.. lk obnoxious new age hippie types, lol so when silvia showed up, my immediate reaction was like "ugh here we go" haha.
the vn does a good job portraying the swaying power of cults and charismatic personalities and different ways in which ana is very very miserable and accordingly susceptible. i also enjoyed your art style with these really thick, bold lines. i do wanna criticize that in the initial bits of the VN, theres some phrasings which are a lil reduntant - i remember things such as "blushing red" or ana going "it's so mind-numbing! i'm bored out of my mind!" at some point. the prose has definitely gotten better towards the end (i imagine when you got into the groove of things more) though. it also leaned a bit more atmospheric towards the end which is more to my taste!
spoilers:
also, the ending aka ana getting drowned actually caught me by surprise, i totally expected her to just enter some sort of cult and the game to leave it at that, haha
Oh yeah, Silvia is certainly a very specific type of person lmao. I'm very glad some of the cult dynamics came though.
Also thank you for your writing feedback, I really appreciate it! It especially means a lot coming from you, since your VN packed such a punch in so few words.
I love doing atmospheric writing, dialogue and interactions are much more of a challenge for me haha.
I also haven't written fiction this long...ever?? I did some (bad) creative writing as a teenager, but everything was only a page or two long. So if this was still an interesting story despite the clunky/repetitive prose, I'm quite happy! And excited to improve my writing going forward.
Entrancing narrative of young-adult alienation, seeking purpose in obsession, and dulling danger-perception through exposure and trust.
(minor spoilers follow)
There is a pervasive sense of doom that Ana radiates as she is pulled in by the overwhelming gravity of the moon. The pacing, the foreshadowing, the tone; all danse together as we watch Ana be pulled along by the red string of fate that her particular views, experiences, and life have tied her to.
Incredible character writing, and design! I love all the little details that guide ana to lower her inhibitions; her sense of security from obsessing over true crime, her beliefs surrounding harm always and only coming from men, her catholic upbringing leaving her needing similar higher powers to place her faith in.
Excellent work with the visuals; they flow together seamlessly.
As a tonal album pairing, I would recommend "Burn Pygmalion!!! a better guide to romance." by The Scary Jokes.
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(minor spoilers below)
I finally played the game! I am amazed by the way you found balance in toxicity and serenity in the Silvia-Ana relationship. I followed the plot with great interest. In terms of art - sprites is one thing (you're doing great non-furry characters too :3 ), but i was absolutely stunned by the drawn background images, especially the last one. They had such a unique quality.
And - i really loved all your choices of music - it's hard to judge my pieces, so i'll be talking about Cancrizans Canon and ConsBosD23 ones. They didn't feel like just complementary to writing. They matched the vibe, but sometimes in a vivid way, adding a different level to the atmosphere.
The moon really shines from your work. I vibe with it and i loved it.
Hope that this is your first game, but not the last!
Yay!! Thank you so much for the kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the plot and the art and the writing :)
Isn't the music lovely?? Your pieces added SO much, and I'm so grateful for Canrizan's Canon offering theirs as well, and for ConsBosD23 posting theirs on Freesound. I'm glad you also felt that they matched and added to the atmosphere! Wouldn't have felt the same at all without this music, so thank you again for that.
I definitely want to make more VNs in the future!
this was very fun!
i studied indian studies in college and in our department, there were quite a few of those like.. lk obnoxious new age hippie types, lol so when silvia showed up, my immediate reaction was like "ugh here we go" haha.
the vn does a good job portraying the swaying power of cults and charismatic personalities and different ways in which ana is very very miserable and accordingly susceptible. i also enjoyed your art style with these really thick, bold lines. i do wanna criticize that in the initial bits of the VN, theres some phrasings which are a lil reduntant - i remember things such as "blushing red" or ana going "it's so mind-numbing! i'm bored out of my mind!" at some point. the prose has definitely gotten better towards the end (i imagine when you got into the groove of things more) though. it also leaned a bit more atmospheric towards the end which is more to my taste!
spoilers:
also, the ending aka ana getting drowned actually caught me by surprise, i totally expected her to just enter some sort of cult and the game to leave it at that, haha
Thank you for reading, and for the kind words!!
Oh yeah, Silvia is certainly a very specific type of person lmao. I'm very glad some of the cult dynamics came though.
Also thank you for your writing feedback, I really appreciate it! It especially means a lot coming from you, since your VN packed such a punch in so few words.
I love doing atmospheric writing, dialogue and interactions are much more of a challenge for me haha.
I also haven't written fiction this long...ever?? I did some (bad) creative writing as a teenager, but everything was only a page or two long. So if this was still an interesting story despite the clunky/repetitive prose, I'm quite happy! And excited to improve my writing going forward.
Consider my chakras clenched.
Entrancing narrative of young-adult alienation, seeking purpose in obsession, and dulling danger-perception through exposure and trust.
(minor spoilers follow)
There is a pervasive sense of doom that Ana radiates as she is pulled in by the overwhelming gravity of the moon. The pacing, the foreshadowing, the tone; all danse together as we watch Ana be pulled along by the red string of fate that her particular views, experiences, and life have tied her to.
Incredible character writing, and design! I love all the little details that guide ana to lower her inhibitions; her sense of security from obsessing over true crime, her beliefs surrounding harm always and only coming from men, her catholic upbringing leaving her needing similar higher powers to place her faith in.
Excellent work with the visuals; they flow together seamlessly.
As a tonal album pairing, I would recommend "Burn Pygmalion!!! a better guide to romance." by The Scary Jokes.
Thank you again for this super thoughtful review, and your sketch page!! I'm so glad you enjoyed my writing <3